tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post7215696560652169131..comments2023-12-25T11:54:00.010+00:00Comments on Writes of Passage: New Creations and Wednesday HaikuDominic de Mattoshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/05171145945316152596noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-74588628650831995162011-01-08T20:27:37.136+00:002011-01-08T20:27:37.136+00:00Your only finished story last year can still be yo...Your only finished story last year can still be your favorite!<br /><br />The ending line is interesting - what's more than a legion? A nation? A world??<br /><br />And the opening has a lot of possibilities. Has he had his consciousness transferred to a woman's body? Brain transplanted? Or just radical gender reassignment surgery?? (Magic transformation spell?)<br /><br />Thanks for taking part in this blogfest. I signed up late, but I'd love to know what you think of my sentences!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-56435661440165199852011-01-07T11:38:31.393+00:002011-01-07T11:38:31.393+00:00Sorry this is late, I had trouble getting into you...Sorry this is late, I had trouble getting into your blog on Wednesday....anyway, wonderful haiku, can identify with the teabreak! Great sentences too....adored your new opening line!Margo Bensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06759845391358543223noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-67368794485720114982011-01-06T19:52:04.522+00:002011-01-06T19:52:04.522+00:00HA! Totally love the new line - in a woman's b...HA! Totally love the new line - in a woman's body!! Great. :0)<br /><br />Haiku... I have mixed feelings about since reading Dean Koontz's FALSE MEMORY where haiku was used for a bad bad purpose!!Margo Kellyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13474612650116392270noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-74995960913451746802011-01-06T17:40:41.581+00:002011-01-06T17:40:41.581+00:00Absolutely fabulous haiku and I love your lines. T...Absolutely fabulous haiku and I love your lines. The one about the man being in a woman's body definitely has me hooked. :O)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-63166293670004801712011-01-06T15:27:07.427+00:002011-01-06T15:27:07.427+00:00Stopping by for the blogfest! That beginning line ...Stopping by for the blogfest! That beginning line is an eyecatcher-- no mistake about that!Danettehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15043881305977386629noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-54448235454959917422011-01-06T14:07:27.153+00:002011-01-06T14:07:27.153+00:00I gotta say, any book starting with that second se...I gotta say, any book starting with that second sentence is a slam dunk.Elena Solodowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03037029195682225565noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-42467785722365141502011-01-06T06:00:57.147+00:002011-01-06T06:00:57.147+00:00your new line made my mouth drop!your new line made my mouth drop!Melissahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12096764010151024050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-24189653321867213792011-01-06T05:40:38.736+00:002011-01-06T05:40:38.736+00:00I love that you put up pictures to go with your ha...I love that you put up pictures to go with your haikus. I want to do that next week! :)Beccahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01335822447056360488noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-10288131422150827642011-01-06T03:58:07.371+00:002011-01-06T03:58:07.371+00:00Hi Dominic! Just popping in to return the favor-VE...Hi Dominic! Just popping in to return the favor-VERY cool-looking blog. I don't write as much SF as I do speculative and fantasy. I've had a few published, but holy moly! Those a hard sells-;-) Good luck with yours!<br /><br />And don't forget to spread the word about my contest-get a few more entries for yourself!Cathy C. Hallhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16491874468936336577noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-34446508135416640012011-01-06T01:32:27.288+00:002011-01-06T01:32:27.288+00:00I loved your Haikus. I wrote so many on Twitter la...I loved your Haikus. I wrote so many on Twitter last year when I got bored with editing. <br />The Blogfest sentences came with very strong ideas. I loved that opening line - it made me smile and I would definitely want to know more.<br />Your more than legion ending is very strong - bold.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-47470841350729531782011-01-06T01:27:59.946+00:002011-01-06T01:27:59.946+00:00Excellent!! Love that last line - "Creating a...Excellent!! Love that last line - "Creating a Chord" I see also "creating accord", and that's too clever for words!! Nicely done ;)<br /><br />Happy New Year!!Jenn @ Youknow...that Blog?http://youknowthatblog.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-59792871097345918642011-01-06T01:15:40.805+00:002011-01-06T01:15:40.805+00:00The new first line is fabulous!
Love the haikus...The new first line is fabulous! <br /><br />Love the haikus. You have such a flair with this form. Happy New Year Dominic!septembermomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01570525910483384484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-24046151058537095792011-01-06T00:35:58.077+00:002011-01-06T00:35:58.077+00:00LOL- great new line- very curious to see where tha...LOL- great new line- very curious to see where that goes! Thank you Fairy much for Participating!Summer Rosshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08122694893668693244noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-61997094981448767602011-01-06T00:14:34.918+00:002011-01-06T00:14:34.918+00:00That first haiku made me chuckle :)That first haiku made me chuckle :)The Words Crafterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14520267901489487512noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-62576841610141060312011-01-05T23:44:12.724+00:002011-01-05T23:44:12.724+00:00I like the first haiku. And I really like your new...I like the first haiku. And I really like your new first line. Amnesia plus an unfamiliar sort of body ...nowhere to go but up, even without a spaceship.<br />-- K<br /><br />Kay, Alberta, Canada<br />An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous TravelKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-57854039200567499572011-01-05T23:22:22.771+00:002011-01-05T23:22:22.771+00:00Yay!! You;ve posted!!
I only say this now cos I&...Yay!! You;ve posted!! <br /><br />I only say this now cos I'm at no. 40 going through the list of lovely Summer's blogfest and you didn't have yours up when I breezed by like a million hours ago - it's so tiring but fun but tiring reading everyone's!!<br /><br />ANYWAY!!!<br /><br />Last year's line: Aw now I do like this. It's so final and yet so hopeful!<br /><br />New line: FABULOUS!!! More please!!<br /><br />And your Haikus: lovely but your tea break haiku is the BEST!! <br /><br />Take care<br />xOld Kittyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13185547869183611159noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4693566710558019887.post-56554326419369503142011-01-05T22:58:50.122+00:002011-01-05T22:58:50.122+00:00Wow! Intriguing new line.
And excellent haiku! I ...Wow! Intriguing new line.<br /><br />And excellent haiku! I like them, esp. the indelible ink one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com