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Thursday, 24 March 2011

Second Crusader Challenge

So here is the second crusader challenge:

Write a flash fiction story (in any format) in 100 words or less, excluding the title. Begin the story with the words, “The goldfish bowl teetered” These four words will be included in the word count.

If you want to give yourself an added challenge (optional, and not part of the judging criteria), see if you can write the story in your own genre (eg if you’re a horror writer, write a horror story; a romance writer, a romance story, etc).


So science fiction it is then ...

The goldfish bowl teetered on the edge of the command console as gravity reasserted itself. Lieutenant Xjansh shot out a pseudopod and caught it, sulphuric acid swirling against the containment field that sealed the top. He carefully slid it back into its recess and re-activated the vacuum clamps. A series of lights blinked on as the bowl went back on line, their cool blue glow illuminating a goldfish with a face like thunder.

“Which one of you numbskulls can’t read plain Vargzush?” the fish roared. “’Off’ means no power ... anywhere.”

The duty ensign blushed green. “Sorry Captain.”

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21 comments:

  1. LOL- this was a great read Dom! I like the take on the fish.

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  2. rofl, I love it. I love the description of the "face like thunder". And that a goldfish is the commander is awesome. :D

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  3. Speechless. That's what I am. LOL Okay, not that speechless. This is AWESOME! I so love reading your sci-fi stuff---you blow me away every time.

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  4. I love a take charge kind of fish. Great story!

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  5. Funny! Is the fish swimming in sulfuric acid, or the alien? I wouldn't want to mess with an acid-loving fish!

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  6. great tale - liked it very much - scary fish - obviously has them all under his fin!

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  7. So funny and original every time! I'm not much into sci-fi but I so enjoy reading your work.

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  8. Wow. That was funny and clever, and I loved it. You should submit that somewhere for publication!

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  9. Oh this made me laugh, thank you!!! A great story!! Take care
    x

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  10. I love how the fish is the captain. It was a surprise and made me grin. :)

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  11. Woot for sci fi! Loved this Dom, thanks for sharing.

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  12. Love that the fish is the captain! And the face like thunder was a great touch.

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  13. LOL! A Fish Captain. I love it.

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  14. Nice job. I certainly am amazed about this kind of writing. Greatjob. Word choice and the sci fi touch.

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  15. Really cool that the little prisoner is the glass bowl turns out to be the guy in command.

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  16. Wow! Amazing descriptions! Great job!

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  17. Ha ha! Love the fish as captain.

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  18. Very nice take!! I like the genre you chose, and you executed it well. I didn't see this on the linky list, though...weird. Dunno how I missed it. Just found it as I was going thru my blog posts in Google Reader. Anyway, good job. :)

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  19. Hi Dominic! You're entry in the 2nd crusade challange has been shortlisted in the judging round. Great job!

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